Do people usually bend over backwards to convince other people how awesome their friends are, even when it doesn't matter one whit to their friend? oO ...humans are weird.
I also wish there was a non-moralizing choice to say you were single. The current choices is "I'm so overly moral that I care if I cheat!" or "Let's keep it secret." How about adding a "Nope, I'm single." choice?
The writing could benefit from some improvement... It's not the worst I've seen, but the dialogues are...not great. (Try Brandon McNulty on YouTube. He has several good vs bad dialogue option for writing.)
The concept for this story is very good. And I absolutely see the influence from Doki Doki Litterature club.
But you fall short of hitting the Vally of the Uncanny that made the abovementioned game have such a creepy impact.
Your game, and your characters are a bit...shallow.
I think this game have the potential to become good in the future, but you need to put a LOT of more work into it --especially the writing, (and the tacky horror parts), if you want to make it a great game.
Tyler is cute, but too over-the-top.
Perhaps it's intentional, but the whole game comes off as a parody on Doki Doki Litterature Club.
Like... all the elements is there, but it's done so bluntly and badly that it feels like the story equivalent of doing surgery with a sledghammer instead of a scalpel.
Hey there, thank you for the feedback. I made this game right after playing DDLC just because I loved it so much and because it's fun. It even says that in the description. The reason this game is bad is because it's one of the first times (or second) I tried to make something like this (meaning the programming, finding art, the dialogue, the story, and so on) hence why it's bad. I know it's bad.
I will take notes of your criticism, as even though I made this game 2 years ago, I still believe I can use it when making my future games, but I will not be updating this game any time soon (or probably ever).
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Do people usually bend over backwards to convince other people how awesome their friends are, even when it doesn't matter one whit to their friend? oO
...humans are weird.
I also wish there was a non-moralizing choice to say you were single.
The current choices is "I'm so overly moral that I care if I cheat!" or "Let's keep it secret." How about adding a "Nope, I'm single." choice?
The writing could benefit from some improvement...
It's not the worst I've seen, but the dialogues are...not great.
(Try Brandon McNulty on YouTube. He has several good vs bad dialogue option for writing.)
The concept for this story is very good.
And I absolutely see the influence from Doki Doki Litterature club.
But you fall short of hitting the Vally of the Uncanny that made the abovementioned game have such a creepy impact.
Your game, and your characters are a bit...shallow.
I think this game have the potential to become good in the future, but you need to put a LOT of more work into it --especially the writing, (and the tacky horror parts), if you want to make it a great game.
Tyler is cute, but too over-the-top.
Perhaps it's intentional, but the whole game comes off as a parody on Doki Doki Litterature Club.
Like... all the elements is there, but it's done so bluntly and badly that it feels like the story equivalent of doing surgery with a sledghammer instead of a scalpel.
If that makes sense.
And why can't you say yes to dating him btw?
That ending was tragic.
And with zero choices. >_>
Hey there, thank you for the feedback. I made this game right after playing DDLC just because I loved it so much and because it's fun. It even says that in the description. The reason this game is bad is because it's one of the first times (or second) I tried to make something like this (meaning the programming, finding art, the dialogue, the story, and so on) hence why it's bad. I know it's bad.
I will take notes of your criticism, as even though I made this game 2 years ago, I still believe I can use it when making my future games, but I will not be updating this game any time soon (or probably ever).
Either way, thank you for playing! :D
Is there a REAL choice in this game?
Cuz there isn't in Doki Doki Litterature club...
Just Tyler....
Just Tyler....
Just Tyler....
Although the Android version grabbed a non-name, I know what you were going for lol. On my computer I would've been called "Gaming" anyway. 😂
That terrified me, I didn't expect it to know my name.
Great job on the game. Gave me a few laughs and nice creepy moments at times too
Is it possible to get a good ending in android version without editing text files?
There is only one ending.
How do u find the files on android i couldn't obtain the secrets
You can't do that on Android.
I want to date Selena
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You left a slash in the wait tag on line 293. Errors the game
Edit: Line 469 also has a scuffed wait tag
i played with the game files thought i could find a secret ending XD
Thanks for the idea! I did just that right now!
wow thank you now i can do my magic...
edit : i found it and it gaves me goosebumps
hint for all the dum dums?
SPOILER:
delet the white file next to the game called memory or something
and open the game
i will try it and by the way tyler is a girl?
Anna is the female character. Tyler is the male one.
thank you
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