1. A Moment of Reflection

Knowing my luck, I probably will. I just want him to look at me the way I look at him at least once. But I won't say a word. I can't. 

Corrected spelling of "knowing" "knwoing"

2. Intense Connection

As the kiss intensifies, you can’t ignore the sensation of his mouth on yours—the way he moves against you, with a hunger that matches your own. His hand slides to the back of your neck, fingers threading through your hair as he pulls you closer. 

Removed: "The taste of him, mixed with the saltiness of your own cum, lingers on your tongue, making everything feel raw, more intimate." It was not appropriate for that scene.